Why Editors Can Sharpen Your Story Gems

Posted on Aug 10, 2015 by   26 Comments | Posted in Blog · Uncategorized

By Wicked Dragon Writer Solutions

Whether you’re Indie or Traditional or Hybrid, as a writer, your editor can not only give you an unbiased opinion on your work, but they will keep your story and its many components straight.

Your character sprouts an extra arm, leg, or other appendage? Dr. Editor will amputate.

Your character is left standing at the side of the road while the rest of your cast merrily trots along? Your editing driver will send a taxi back for a pick up.

A character decides to not only change their hair color, but their height (without taking off their shoes)? Your editing beauty consultants will dash into action, adjusting color and adding (or removing) heels as necessary.

Editors chew their way through the basics—spelling, sentence structure, verb usage—all vital parts of your story, but what about the more subtle parts?  The true skill of an editor will shine when they begin to battle descriptions, active versus passive verbs, points of views, character motivation and behaviors, plausible plotlines, world crafting, and believability.

I’m a sucker for examples, so let’s head into the treacherous world of show-don’t-tell. You all know this pit of despairing darkness, because as writers we don’t want to tell our readers about our characters and world, we want to show them. This requires stronger, more active verbs, closer points of view, and vivid descriptions, which will trap your readers in your story.

We’ll use a passage that won’t land me on a hit list, as the author and I share mental headroom.  This is from my first book, SHADOW’S EDGE from 2011.

The original passage read:

Raine moved like lightening to catch the little black remote before it hit the ground. Eden gave a frustrated shriek and went after Ryder’s face with her long nails, scoring three long scratches before her could stop her.

Ryder cursed, yanking the doctor’s arms behind her back, forcing her to face forward.  Raine didn’t spare Eden a glance, but moved in to the cell. She could feel Cheveyo coming up behind her. Using her magic, Raine called up a small illuminating ball of light to chase back the darkness from the cell.

Huddled in the corner was a naked Gavin. Fresh cuts, seeping burns, and trickles of blood mixed with sweat-drenched, tangled hair made macabre abstracts over the shaking arms, wrapped around drawn up legs.

This small passage is an action scene, which demands strong verbs, vivid descriptions, and showing the reader what’s happening, not telling them.

Take the very first line: Saying she moved like lightening is telling, not showing.

How is a writer to conquer this beast? They shall craft stronger verb usage.

Picking the right verb makes a world of difference. No writer wants their reader to get bored and move on. The key to recognizing and beating the crap out of passive voice is not to add -ing to every verb or tack on “was”, because that means you’ve begun to travel down the passive trail and meander into boring territory. Spice it up. Kick it around,make sure your sentences do something.Each chapter, each sentence must move your story forward. 

Your goal as a storyteller is to keep your reader up late through the night to finish “…just one more page” regardless of the fact that at the crack of dawn they have a meeting their entire career hinges upon.

Watch what happens when you show your readers with stronger verb use:

Raine sprang forward and caught the little black remote before it hit the ground. Eden shrieked and raked Ryder’s face with her long nails, scoring three long gashes before he could stop her.

He cursed and yanked her arms behind her back, forcing her to face forward. Without sparing her a glance, Raine dashed into the cell with Cheveyo right behind her. She summoned a small ball of light to chase back the darkness from the cell.

Gavin was huddled in the corner, naked. Fresh cuts, seeping burns, and trickles of blood, mixed with sweat-drenched, tangled hair threw macabre abstracts over his shaking arms, which were wrapped around his drawn-up legs.

Are you on the edge of your seat yet? Want to turn the page and see what happens next? This is the beauty of showing versus telling. It’s worth every drop of blood you sweat as you transfer those voices in your head to paper.

Editors will be the first to nudge you off the cliff of show-don’t-tell when you can’t get your feet to move. They mind the details of your story so you won’t be inundated with emails, which politely point out the errors of your story. To be a successful writer, you need to continue to grow your craft and your skill set. Editors are here to help you hone your Pen of Magic so you don’t get caught in the subtle trap of “same story, different….” You get the picture.

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Amber Kallyn is an award-winning, multi-published author in paranormal and erotic romance. She has a degree in English Education, and over eight years experience working with authors (published and pre-published) as an editor, critique partner, and beta reader. While those she’s worked with have claimed Amber must have been born with a red pen in hand, those same authors love how she helps get a manuscript cohesive and polished, ready for publishing or agent hunting.

Jami Gray is an award-winning, multi-published author of the Urban Fantasy series, The Kyn Kronicles, and the Paranormal Romantic Suspense series, The PSY-IV Teams. Armed with a degree in Journalism, she spent the last five years honing written gems for various authors. After eighteen years of carving out flashy corporate communiques, she joined up with Amber Kallyn to forge their own editorial path, opening Wicked Dragon Writer Solutions.  She currently works as a freelance editor for a boutique publisher.

26 Responses to "Why Editors Can Sharpen Your Story Gems"

  1. Comment by Jami Gray
    August 10, 2015 1:34 pm

    Thank you, FF&P for letting us come and visit with your readers. Happy Monday, all!

    • Comment by Nancy Lee Badger
      August 10, 2015 2:32 pm

      You are welcome. These are great tips! Editors are worth GOLD.

  2. Comment by Amanda Uhl
    August 10, 2015 2:49 pm

    This was a great post. I liked your practical example…I have been working on honing my manuscript to show more, tell less, and this was helpful.

    • Comment by Jami Gray
      August 12, 2015 3:12 pm

      Amanda,
      I’m so glad you found this helpful. Good luck with your writing!

  3. Comment by Ashley York
    August 10, 2015 3:36 pm

    Great article and very true. My editor is worth his weight in gold.

    • Comment by Jami Gray
      August 12, 2015 3:13 pm

      I’m with you, Ashley. I love my editors as well. There’s so much you can learn, and every bit helps sharpen your skills.

  4. Comment by JC Page
    August 10, 2015 6:31 pm

    Thanks, Amber and Jami! Great advice and tips. I’ll keep your contact information. Wonderful to have your services available:)

    • Comment by Jami Gray
      August 12, 2015 3:14 pm

      Thank you, JC! We’re here if you need us.

  5. Comment by Rhenna Morgan
    August 11, 2015 6:18 am

    Thanks for sharing with us!

  6. Comment by Kathy Crouch
    August 11, 2015 8:54 pm

    Great post, one minor detail you misspelled LIGHTNING twice the bolt from the sky is lightNing. The day dawning is lightENing. Sorry, but that caught my eye. Not an editor just a writer that’s toddling along. Thanks for sharing.

    • Comment by Jami Gray
      August 12, 2015 3:15 pm

      LOL, see Kathy, this is why two sets of eyes (or more) are better than one. There’s always something that slips under the gimlet eye.

  7. Comment by HiDee Ekstrom
    August 13, 2015 9:54 pm

    Great tips! Thank you for sharing!


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